NocturnalDevotion:
A large part of me doubts if this is actually a true story and absolutely no part of me cares if it is or not because you are such an amazing writer and you totally should submit this!!!
So often men on these sites write crudely about fat women to the point that it seems they have no actual attraction to them and probably don’t even realize it, just because they don’t have a way with words at all. The way you write the reader can feel the heat of your attraction for this girl and the situation! I haven’t been this impressed in a long time.
It is legitimately good writing. Don't see that very much on here.